The Mentor Has Spoken

At last, I recieved the feedback from my screenwriting mentor; Chris. It was all quite positive, and some of the issues he raised, have already been corrected in my second draft. Way ahead of you. One major issue he raised, found me scrambling to figure out a reason/explanation. In a few moments, I found a way to mention the problem in the script; at least enough to appease the people who will notice. It's enough to make the viewers/readers realize that someone caught the possible error, but it will be thrown away soon after. The nicest thing he said was that he could see this easily being produced. Yes! In addition, he was pleasantly grossed out by all the correct gross-out moments. All other tidbits of info will be incorporated into the next rewrite. Thanks mentor!